His Padawan

His Padawan

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seabird16 By seabird16 Updated Feb 22

"How far would you go to save her?"    
"I'd die for her" 

The bond between Master and Padawan is unbreakable. The bond of true love is undeniable.   Anakin Skywalker, the Hero With No Fear, is falling. His love for Padme and his fear of losing her is tearing him apart. The young Jedi Knight is drawing closer and closer to the Dark Side. Can he be saved?  
Kiara, the Shadow, is broken.  Finally reappearing at the Jedi Temple after a mysterious disappearance upon the death of her Master, she refuses to, or cannot, speak.  Scarred in body and soul, she is lost and hopeless. Can  a new Master save her?

I can hear Jack Sparrow saying "Oh, good." all happily after I read that part about dieing for her.
anthonykz anthonykz Oct 17, 2013
This is a good base. I'd recommend adding more detail about what they're doing. I didn't know Anakin had turned around until after Obi-wan said something about it. Also, don't forget commas after dialogue tags. Hope this helps!