The Broken girl and The guy who loved her -on hold

The Broken girl and The guy who loved her -on hold

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Tori By creativebliss16 Updated Apr 02, 2011

Pandora is a very troubled girl, with violent streak, abuse of alcohol and drugs, as well as all of her mental problems such as schizophrenia, Multiple personality disorder, bi-polar and depression. She is a very hard girl to get to know let alone get close to. Pandora doesn't stick to one guy for too long but when she decides to trust her friend Wesley and date him for more than two weeks only to have him betray her, she goes back to being closed up and she stays closed up, that is until her mother moves her to Charlotte, West Virgina a small town of 500 people where she is the new kid that no one likes except for one guy; Russell Jones.
Russell is your typical cowboy and is pretty well liked and well known around the town and school, when he comes encounter with Pandora, he realizes that there is something about her that he is attracted too but first he has to bring down all of her walls and gain her trust to learn her secrets.
Pandora is fearful of Russell because she herself is too much for her mother to handle but when she figures that Russell is the only one to quiet all the noise around her then she becomes terrified.
Can she trust him with her secrets? Can she even begin to open herself up to this guy and love him? Who knows but Russell is determined to get Pandora while Pandora is determined to get AWAY from Russell.

anakelia anakelia Jan 20, 2011
WOW! that was one crazy nightmare!. 
                              OK, so you got some grammatical errors. for example right after "continue to haunt you" you need a period and to capitalize "well," 
                              Also, break up the big block. A space after every paragraph so the reader doesn't go croosseyed :D