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Painful Oblivion (On Hold)

Painful Oblivion (On Hold)

2.3K Reads 137 Votes 12 Part Story
abbz999 By abbz999 Updated Jul 15, 2012

Could you bring light into your world, when darkness is all you know? If you woke up one day not knowing who you are, what would you do? 
Find yourself in the world of the unknown as you follow the story of a girl who wakes up in a very dangerous situation. Determined to uncover the truth, will she or will her very existence remain shrouded in mystery? The saying goes that ignorance is bliss but in this case it's a painful oblivion...

NightmareDLuffy NightmareDLuffy Jul 25, 2012
Hmm this sounds pretty good so far. A lot of stories that start with a dream, don't keep it so vague and in your case this is good as it is allowing the readers to build on their imagination :) xx
abbz999 abbz999 Jul 13, 2012
@MsArtemis ah ok I see. I've been meaning to change my description so think I'll get on that tonight. Thanks for the feedback :-)
MsArtemis MsArtemis Jul 13, 2012
@abbz999 I switched from reading the descrption to the prologue and it had said it about 3 times in a 30 second reading period.
abbz999 abbz999 Jul 13, 2012
@MsArtemis Thank you for your comment. Do you mean in the prologue or the whole story as I only used it once in the prologue.
MsArtemis MsArtemis Jul 13, 2012
This is good despite the word 'oblivion' having been repeated too often.
Sasha2288 Sasha2288 Jul 12, 2012
It's good, but the second paragraph could use a little variety in sentence structure. Other than that it's very well done. :)