One night . One call . One dead .
Lilly gets a call from Delcan telling her to save him. The only problem is Delcan has been dead for two weeks now.
I love the suspense!
Short, but sweet. I like that about a book.
questions, questions, questions. What happened to Declan? If he's dead how did he remember Lilly's number?
so many things that I wouldn't doubt will be answered in later chapters.
I can't wait to read more!
Generally, I hate the suspense, but, in this case, I liked it
#oceanbookclub I really like the suspense and the fact that u hv mostly used dialogues and kept it short and simple... it has made me feel really interested and now I really want to read more....
I'm really into this prelude. The mystery it leaves is beyond great.
Third line: "the voice sound(s)"
You also have twice sounds for such a short chapter, maybe try to vary a little and remember show v. tell: "He's panting" "His breath is rapid"... Something like this brings across the same message, but stays away from the traditional tell verbs.
Interesting start. Looking forward to the backstory.
I saw a couple of mistakes, not sure if you wanted me to point those out :)