That Wasn't Supposed to Happen

That Wasn't Supposed to Happen

5.4K Reads 287 Votes 10 Part Story
Gary Soh By GarySoh Completed

When Kathy McFrady picked up an unlikely hitchhiker on the road to Ohio, she never expected what's going to come next. Everything that wasn't supposed to happen, managed to unravel right in front of her in every possible way.

  • adventure
  • chicklit
  • contemporary
  • women
DavidClack DavidClack Sep 24
Bit of a muddle at the very start maybe ' so it was' to begin  and  ' at first I thought it was'
ccsmudge ccsmudge Sep 26
I mean I think he was a bit hard on her.....its not like she deliberately aimed for his crotch.    At least I don't think she did. Lol
Aelledee Aelledee Sep 26
Reb is obvi abnormal, I just wonder who or what she is. She seems out of touch with the world
DavidClack DavidClack Sep 24
Some pacing issues, some good dialogue though. Needs a good edit and some sentences need restructuring but a good start.