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The Right Guy?

The Right Guy?

2.3K Reads 45 Votes 7 Part Story
Bookworm78 By Bookworm78 Updated Jul 11, 2013

Tori Torres has such a great life. Great friends, a great boyfriend, until one day she meets the guy that can possibly change things for the better or for the worse. Things start to change from there on. While on the other hand Jessi, her best friend  has problems of her own. She is yet to find the perfect guy. Does she meet the right one or will she have to continue the search. Will she ever meet THE guy and will Tori possibly make the right decision? Follow these two on their crazy and maybe interesting  journey of picking the right guy.

megallaghergirl megallaghergirl Jul 27, 2013
Good start, but don't tell the characters whole life story! :) xx
tianajade tianajade Feb 27, 2011
A good beginning. Your writing flows real nicely. There are no spelling mistakes, which is great! (: I agree with the comment down below; maybe a little bit too much description. A good storyline, though. Nice work, and keep writing! :) *Voted*.
Bookworm78 Bookworm78 Feb 26, 2011
@prettygiirlj @samanthaaaaa Thank you for the feedback. I'll try my best an fix things up.
samanthaaaaa samanthaaaaa Feb 26, 2011
it's cute so far! But I agrre with the first comment. Spice it up a little. :) But it's really good!
IBreakHearts IBreakHearts Feb 26, 2011
Nice start  i agree a little with the comment below... but i see nothing else wrong *voted* :)