Nudes

Nudes

8.4K Reads 403 Votes 11 Part Story
ella By -unwish Updated 3 days ago

"Oh shit that's not the right person"

You should bear in mind that you need to catch the reader's attention as fast as possible and bring the main theme out. However, I think you did well in the pace. Adding more descriptions in your story would definite help•^!^•
                              Hope this helps
The reason gay and lesbians are always said to have better fashion sense is because they know what they would like to see on the same sex and then they dress like that
ashu_15 ashu_15 Oct 20
It's a nice start, I guess I'll stay tuned to know what's next...
                              Keep going :)
- - Oct 17
Ella, 
                              I really enjoyed the first chapter. It gives you a sense of who the characters are and what their personalities are. This chapter made me laugh, keep up the fantastic work (: 
                              
                              -Kelly
From what I've read, you're a practical person. Why are you dating someone you don't LIKE like?