MELODY (v.slow updates)

MELODY (v.slow updates)

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most_bay By most_bay Updated Apr 06

I pledge myself to you, my love,
My life is no longer my own,
My afterlife is unknown,
If I'm fortunate,
If I'm adequate,
To be in the heavens,
I'll plead for my home.

Your eyes are my home,
Your breath is my air,
Your voice is my song,
Your arms are my shrine,
Your heart is my altar,
Your smile is my prayer,
Your hand is my prize,
I ache to make you mine.

I need you in every way,
 My rib is not in place. 
 My certain heart calls you,
 My present,
 My future,
 My solace,
 My first and last,
 My onliest love.
 My other self, 
 My life,
'I love you' is not enough. 
***

Melody Summer is a nineteen year old homeless girl with a tragic past. Shy and introverted​ with major insecurities. Melody aged out of foster care and was left without guidance to fend for herself in the concrete jungle of Manhattan. When she meets Akram Sadiq. Twenty one, Handsome Juilliard student, her life takes a very unexpected turn.

**This story is a first draft so hopefully will be edited once finished.

  • akram
  • cleanlove
  • egypt
  • fosterkid
  • homeless
  • love
  • melody
  • newyork
  • piano
  • porjectreadersreact
  • projectclean
  • romance
  • safelove
  • tbeawards
AuraFinley AuraFinley Mar 30
I am done.
                              
                              I haven’t heard anyone leave off the “I” and just start with “am”, but I’ve seen in some Wattpad books.
AuraFinley AuraFinley Mar 30
I’d put this line up so it’s in line with the internal dialogue
- - Apr 14
Wonderful start... The story is intriguing... Curious to know what comes next...
AnnaRain1 AnnaRain1 May 10
This is really, really, really good! (Sorry i can't come up with a better way to explain how well this is written. I just finished finals. So my brain is a ball of mush.)
Hey! I'm here re-reading because it's been way too long! I LOVE the picture. It's a different one from last time. It's awesome. And your writing is even better than I remember. I'm excited to dive in again 😁
AuraFinley AuraFinley Mar 30
Since it’s after a comma, make “are” lowercase. 
                              
                              The “a” in “a quiet voice murmured” should be lowercase too.