Old Lovers; A Naruto Fanfiction

Old Lovers; A Naruto Fanfiction

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KatieKat By Silverkitty77 Updated Oct 08

Sakura. She's the pink haired medic, strong, intelligent, skilled in the medical field. Yet her heart is broken to the extent of her being unable to fix it when she overhears a certain conversation...
Hinata. She's the Hyuuga heiress, quiet, soft, but sure. Her unique defensive style cannot be seen from anywhere else;  yet she couldn't defend herself against the pain when she overhears a certain conversation...
Ino. She's the flower girl, a bit bipolar, bright, skilled with tampering the mind. Ino was never one for caring what others thought of her, but a certain conversation leaves her feeling fragile and unsure...
Tenten. The Weapons Mistress. She's known throughout the land for her point-blank accuracy, and her friends look up to her for her bravery, her determination, and her ability to get through obstacles. But a certain conversation might be an obstacle she can't get through...
These four girls are betrayed, heartbroken and humiliated. Against the odds, they climb their way up to the highest of the highest. Four years later, they meet their....
Old Lovers.

JackSnow103 JackSnow103 Sep 17
Your way of writing is good but there are a few things wrong with the plot; Why would they leave Konoha just because of a few boys? Why would they join the akatsuki? They don't hate their village, just the guys. They also can't leave with no problems. That's all.
JackSnow103 JackSnow103 Sep 17
There are guards. They would have to convince them, or harm them.
JackSnow103 JackSnow103 Sep 17
I like the book but and it's great but you should figure out a better reason why they leave the village.
JackSnow103 JackSnow103 Sep 17
But you are doing a great job! If I wrote a fanfic it would probably be much worse.