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Someday Never Comes (manxman)

Someday Never Comes (manxman)

30.2K Reads 1.2K Votes 19 Part Story
J.L. Loy By JLR_Loy Updated Jan 02

An amorous (possibly Norwegian) ski instructor, a tourist trap brochure, a stray rock; Christian Wallace isn't sure which one's to blame for landing him in Defiance, Colorado, population 453 and in turn, at what might just be the world's shittiest bar.
Disillusioned with the police force after thirteen years on the job and a disastrous case, all Christian wanted was to get clear of Seattle and the familiar faces that went with it. He hadn't set out looking for a job, especially not one that came with a cranky boss that couldn't remember his name, a pair of warring siblings and a falling down hotel. Oh yeah, and every Woodstock reject west of the Mississippi. But then life, and love work in mystifying ways.

Troublesome Troublesome May 11
I love me some typos cuz all I do is scan over them and interpret them as the word they were actually meant to be lmao 😂😂😂
stardust24601 stardust24601 Feb 25, 2016
So, that was an amazing start to the story! You set it up with a great hook, what with the car at the edge of that cliff, and the ending is also perfect. However, I'd suggest looking over your syntax a bit- it can get monotonous and choppy at times.
Twoony Twoony Feb 20, 2016
What a way to start a story...I stared wide-eyed as I read because, wow. That was incredibly detailed to the point that, for a moment, I didn't think I was reading. I actually saw it like a movie in my head. It was a great way to start the story, very original and well done!
JacquesLawson JacquesLawson Feb 29, 2016
I've never seen such a detailed and captivating prologue. Way to begin a story author. Well done!  U actually painted the picture in my head. Brilliant!
sanmariano sanmariano Feb 22, 2016
I agree with the dude below. At times the commas and phrases make it choppy reading. Otherwise, very good!
manethan manethan Aug 24, 2016
I really enjoyed this,I'm looking forward to the rest.
                              I found it easy to read and who cares about grammar and mistakes as long as it makes sense and you can understand it is that matters to a reader! Nice work 👍😉❤️