intro to wolf packs. blah blah blah. very old idea
i really liked your story! i'll be sure to read some others of yours too! :)
Just read the first part of ur story and thought it was good :)
The spacing is not right at all. You have no paragraphs, just random sentences that don't flow because they are cut off mid-sentence. I noticed ur other story is like that too. Good storyline and writing!
Thanks so much guys! I went through it and did put some more space so hopefully it will be easier now. Thanks for the time and I will check yours too.
if you kept some space in between the conversations,your story will be so much longer. besides that, i think it's really great so far. keep up the good work! :) :) :) :)
I like this story too!!! Like i said before just make the parapgraphs have more space in between them and when people are talking so its not all jumbled together..