~ON HOLD~The Lost Princess (A Harry Potter fanfic)

~ON HOLD~The Lost Princess (A Harry Potter fanfic)

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Becca Lestrange By slytherclaw7 Updated Oct 16, 2011

A mute girl is found in a closet at her house by none other then Dumbledore. She's taken to Hogwarts where she will embark on her journey, meeting new friends, enemies, and the unexpected. What will become of our new friend, known as Becca Swanson... Or so we think.

  • dumbledore
  • granger
  • harry
  • hermione
  • hogwarts
  • potter
  • ron
  • severus
  • snape
  • weasley
slytherclaw7 slytherclaw7 Oct 09, 2011
I'm gonna continue the story and keep writing, just dont forget to tell me what you think, I love to get feedback about my work- good and bad!! :)
JessicaLauron JessicaLauron Oct 09, 2011
I like some of the changes you made!! :) Are you going to write more, or is that the end?
JessicaLauron JessicaLauron Oct 09, 2011
Couple spelling mistakes. Diagon Alley, puked, lose/losing not loose/loosing
JessicaLauron JessicaLauron Oct 09, 2011
Don't abbreviate professor. We know what you mean, but they never did that in the Harry Potter books.
JessicaLauron JessicaLauron Oct 09, 2011
last paragraph on the first page "I became sad, knowing I wouldn't see my best (and only) friend." Why wouldn't she see her? Aren't they going to go to school together?
JessicaLauron JessicaLauron Oct 09, 2011
5th paragraph-"same clothes that I had found him in"
                              She didn't find him, he found her..."same clothes that he had found me in" or "same clothes that I had first seen him in" ???