It Shines

It Shines

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dear_you_ By dear_you_ Updated Jul 06, 2013

Poetry, that comes in bit. Like ripped up pieces tossed on the floor in a fit when dreams are smashed. Swept under the bed, and forgotten

  • bully
  • cry
  • cutting
  • dark
  • depression
  • dieing
  • fighting
  • harm
  • loud
  • pull
  • sadness
  • school
  • self
  • shimmering
  • shine
  • shines
  • suicide
  • teen
  • through
  • yelling
dear_you_ dear_you_ Jun 17, 2013
@taimeipala
                              Ah thank you, very much.
                              Oh I didn't even notice those mistakes thank you! They say you can rarely spot your own mistakes.
                              Yes, I spelt it that way for symbolism, in terms of a wrong death. With you pointing that out, I noticed I had spelt it correctly at the beginning.
jonquilles jonquilles Jun 17, 2013
this was really good. i liked the theme you set up.
                              the descriptive imagery and your vocabulary are commendable.
                              voted. 
                              
                              quick corrections:
                              
                              ...crawling over its scarred...
                              ...the nonexistent...
                              
                              
                              *also, did you intentionally spell "dying" as "dieing" at the end?