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The Initiation

The Initiation

129 Reads 13 Votes 9 Part Story
b_olski By b_olski Completed

A final obstacle stands in Cadet Wren Yorick's way before he can join an elite 23rd-century military squadron: a trust exercise on a long-abandoned installation on the planet Venus that is rumored to be haunted. Isolated and disoriented upon waking up from his induced sleep, Wren must rely on the guidance of his superiors to complete the task. They remotely direct him on his solitary journey through a vicious and unfamiliar landscape rife with whipping winds and extreme heat to the remnants of the former colony. His commanding officers, however, do little to neutralize his sense that there is something more, something somehow occupying the bleak geography that he traverses. This leads Wren to question what he knows about his mission, his commanders and even his own eyes and ears before he reaches the small colonial outpost, at which point his life forever changes.

b_olski b_olski Feb 18, 2016
Thanks for the comment. I appreciate you taking a look at the story.  At times, I do tend to be overly descriptive, especially in slower-paced tales such as this one. Sorry for the delayed response. Still learning my way around here.
talesofastory talesofastory Jan 31, 2016
Ah, well perfect, you continue with an explanation of what the trust exercise is in the third paragraph. That's good.
                              It keeps being different but I like the way you describe landscape, feeling or sensible impressions...
                              Some things sound unhealthy for Wren.