Redemption

Redemption

1.1K Reads 106 Votes 14 Part Story
Lee By MasterMcGillivs Updated Jan 02, 2012

Nicole McGannison is the average teenager. She loves to party, she loves to go to concerts and just be with her friends There's a point in every teenagers life where they feel like they're invincible. Like they can never get caught, never get in trouble. But everything great comes to an end, including the bad boy of town who may be nothing but trouble.

dulce995girl dulce995girl Dec 23, 2011
something familiar happened to me...and it was weird to read all of that when I kept those feelings inside...but I could never leave my friends for a guy...
Everyseasonz Everyseasonz Dec 22, 2011
Great grammar, nice descriptions. It sounds so real andI think most of the people can relate on this. Voted!
ShadowOfTheDay23 ShadowOfTheDay23 Dec 22, 2011
Wow, that was a very strong beginning. It had so much feeling in it
                              I like it, I feel like this is something a lot of people can relate to and when they read it they know that they're not the only one that's lost a love. 
                              Great start. On to read more :)
jessiemh_ jessiemh_ Dec 22, 2011
I loveeee your opening, sooo captivating :) just make sure it's not cliche it's good though that we're starting with someone broken, we'll be able to watch the character grow throughout the story so nicely done :)
MasterMcGillivs MasterMcGillivs Dec 21, 2011
@Kembler13 I know haha well I was watching the show when I started this story so I attempted xD
Kembler13 Kembler13 Dec 21, 2011
I really like your style of writing and this is a great beginning! But just so you know, I love the description you did with your cover, Very clever XD (It was a little hard for me to not replace the words with the actual fresh prince of bellair words in my head though hehe)