Running Red

Running Red

7.6K Reads 318 Votes 20 Part Story
Eli Somnium By FlyOn97 Updated Mar 18, 2014

My heart hammers in my chest. Fire trails down my spine. My shoulders contort, my back stretches, my face breaks...
I fight him. I struggle. I rage. 
And still I am being taken.
My sight fades. The sharp tang of blood is an endless. The world around me is nothing but the black of my own insanity and I am dying.
It mocks me. I cry at it, cry my anger, my sadness, my pain, and it hangs listlessly in the sky, suspended by heartstrings and I know I want nothing more than to cut them and take it from it's sparkling home in the sky and hold it out to my brother and say, “You see? You see what this had made me become?”
And then running. Running and running and running and, then, red.

  • awesome
  • blinded
  • blood
  • brothers
  • bushes
  • castle
  • dance
  • danger
  • death
  • direction
  • fly
  • forest
  • friends
  • funny
  • gathering
  • harry
  • kill
  • lady
  • limbs
  • love
  • man
  • marktwain
  • monster
  • mystery
  • one
  • potter
  • ripping
  • rugged
  • runner
  • scary
  • secret
  • sharp
  • split
  • supernatural
  • sword
  • teeth
  • turning
  • voldemort
  • wall
  • war
  • wolf
  • wolves
FlyOn97 FlyOn97 Mar 19, 2013
@punkkidslater 
                              Actually, no I don't really. I /could/ but since that isn't the point of this story, I don't worry too much about it. Too many other things happen for me to thing about it much. =]
FlyOn97 FlyOn97 Mar 12, 2013
@Firebender_Zeke 
                              Ha! Did you really never comment? That's okay. Goodess knows I need to comment on some of your chapters. . .
FlyOn97 FlyOn97 Feb 10, 2013
@ivory05 
                              Thanks. Glad you liked it!
                              
                              @CosetteCloudCastle 
                              I see. Well, it's too bad that you didn't really like the story, but I'm still had you liked the writing. Thanks for reading!
CosetteCloudCastle CosetteCloudCastle Feb 07, 2013
You are very good with descriptions but this isn't my kind of story. Your dialogue flows well and the details are very good. I just can't get into the story for myself.
ivory05 ivory05 Feb 07, 2013
your story is very descriptive.. its interesting in a way that you paint the background and emotion of the characters on the readers head..
                              
                              off to continue reading...
raindrop raindrop Jan 30, 2013
"...,' her expression became one of shock. 'And...'"
                              Since the little action of becoming shock interrupts the dialogue, I think that the period should be a comma and the capital a lowercase.