Raw [My Manifesto Poem]

Raw [My Manifesto Poem]

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Courtney By XxForgottenWhisperxX Completed

I am dead-
    
    almost.
    
    My soul is
    
    Destroyed.
    
    I can barely sleep
    
    when all I can think of
    
    are the mistakes I've made.
    
    I've made too many.
    
    I've hurt too many.
    
    I've faked too many
    
    smiles.
    
    My heart is
    
    nonexistant.
    
    I feel nothing but
    
    numb.
    
    How can I begin to have
    
    hopes and dreams,
    
    when they always are
    
    crushed.
    
    My ears ring from the sound
    
    of blood rushing through my viens.
    
    Let my heart freeze over,
    
    grant me my silence.
    
    My skin is
    
    raw.
    
    Torn off my so-called
    
    friends and loves.
    
    Sliced apart by myself,
    
    I'll never be good
    
    enough.
    
    Ripped away by those who
    
    acted before thinking.
    
    Don't judge when
    
    you don't even know.
    
    Only my mind remains,
    
    enough to spit out a
    
    final
    
    thought.
    
    I'm hanging on by a thread,
    
    and it's time to fall.
    
    I don't want to die,
    
    but I just can't live
    
    in this world, in this life.
    
    Please remember me as I was
    
    before I was
    
    raw.
    
    Please don't forget.
    
    Guns go off,
    
    the thread breaks,
    
    And I am
    
    nothing except
    
    cold,
    
    dead,
    
    and raw.
    
    ***
    
    This was m...

I loved it mainly because i can relate. you foot note at the bottem is so true. i am the one begging to be saved...
yogirl184 yogirl184 Dec 15, 2011 11:23PM
wow i really like the poem it made me realise how serious suicide really is.
@Behind_Strings that's too bad. Hey, feel better, okay? It all gets better. Promise
Behind_Strings Behind_Strings Sep 29, 2011 03:10PM
I am literally reading this while in in the hospital , waiting for an ambulance to take me to the mental institute for probation because of attemtp 
                                    uicide.  Ironic
@foreverhidion3 hey, I like your idea. I wont use it the exact same way, but I'll try to switch up the ending a little bit. Thank you for the suggestion :)
foreverhidion3 foreverhidion3 Sep 29, 2011 06:25AM
hmmm... I like this.
                                    But...What if it ended...
                                    Please don't forget.
                                    Guns go off,
                                    the thread breaks,
                                    and I am 
                                    nothing
                                    but
                                    raw.
                                    
                                    I don't know, I felt like the word "raw" was very strong in this piece...and feel like it could close it a little more powerfully...?
                                    lol
                                    Or not...
                                    Tell me what you think!