The Story of Ramzly Dang

The Story of Ramzly Dang

689 Reads 11 Votes 15 Part Story
Remington Talley By Ramzly93 Updated Jan 17, 2012

Ramzly Dang a 16 year old boy who lives in the small villiage of Ciltoff on the planet Tallia, finds his life radicaly changed because of a man named Vaxul, a demon from another time, who attacked Ciltoff to kill Ramzly.  Now Ramzly travels toward Astarica, the capital of Tallia to take revenge on Vaxul.

  • revenge
  • swords
Dreamingalong Dreamingalong Nov 30, 2011
You need to work on your spelling,grammar, and punctuation. Also, be more descriptive.
Ramzly93 Ramzly93 Sep 29, 2011
usualy you comment at the bottom of the page of the chapter your talking about go to the next chapter scroll to the bottom and you'll see what i mean
CalebPritchett CalebPritchett Sep 29, 2011
I think it's really good, and I want to know more about the character. Write on it some more, I want to read the rest!!!
onceadaydreamer onceadaydreamer Sep 28, 2011
hi!! you mixed up ur tenses a few times. I liked this chapter though.