A Throne and a Baby

A Throne and a Baby

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Queta Fox By QuetaFox Completed

Ellie didn't know taking her mother on a vacation would lead to becoming something more surprising. Finding out about her mothers past with a King, to knowing about hidden secrets regarding those she loved and trusted the most. 

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Please don't judge by the description above.  Read the Prologue and comment if interested in the story then I will start to post.

zoey_morgan zoey_morgan Jul 15
You need to rewrite all of it, because the subject verb agreement is off. The idea is good, but the words do not flow. The book idea you have is good, but it needs to be edited.
Omg I'm from Denmark. Okay I'll calm down now, even when I wasn't really hype but whatever
zoey_morgan zoey_morgan Jul 15
You desperately need to add some punctuation. The whole prologue seems like one big run on sentence. I know there is some, but hardly enough.
WPrlnelyyys WPrlnelyyys Jan 05
Hi, do you want to edit this story? Like just arrange it. It's a good story but I'm having a problem reading it with all the space.
                              Message me if you agree. 
                              
                              Ps. No offense ;)