Syrup (BwWm)

Syrup (BwWm)

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shantel By Shantel_A Updated Oct 19

"Ashlyn how can you not see just how beautiful you really are?" 

Ryan looked at me in the mirror but my eyes could not meet his. "Your ebony skin is so beautiful". 
He rubbed my bare arms while looking me straight In the eyes. "Your eyes give me hope". Ryan spun  me around. We were now chest to chest and eye to eye. "Your smile, oh how your smile could  make a cold heart melt". "You have curves that could drive a sane man insane".  They're so mouth watering, so sweet and thick. Like Syrup.  There, he had me. Those very words took my breath away. No man has ever made me feel so alive so awake before. Not even close.Until now.

lanicert lanicert Oct 28
Intriguing opening paragraph. FYI, in the second sentence you have a subject verb disagreement. (I think it should say "would've" instead of "will be".) Just giving some constructive criticism since you ok'd it in he author's note. 😊