Beneath the Ashes

Beneath the Ashes

172 Reads 16 Votes 4 Part Story
Nikki By sizzleburns Updated Dec 18, 2012

Callie Gorstein has always tried to hide behind her hood. She's afraid as to how people will react if they see her ugly burn mark from a previous house fire. However she soon learns from a mysterious boy that there are worse things than accidentally causing a fire that she thinks killed her Mom. Callie is desperate to find the evidence that she didn't do it, that she's innocent. But more than ever, she want to win back her Father's love. With the help of a boy who expirienced far worse, and the hope to hope, Callie plunges into a past in which she never dreamed of going back to.

  • burns
  • fiction
  • fire
  • teen
JaimeNC JaimeNC Jan 16, 2013
I think that your story has potential as far as content and you could expand on it and make it really interesting, but you do have lot of misspellings and missing words that makes the story seem more amateur and disturbs the flow.
JaimeNC JaimeNC Dec 02, 2012
Very great, you lured me in and your writing style is very interesting, as well as your word choice. You set the stage for your book very well, and I can't wait to read on!.
sizzleburns sizzleburns Sep 08, 2012
@Smilies Thank You!! :) This comment made my day! I really appreciate it!! :D
sizzleburns sizzleburns Jun 20, 2012
@StRaWbErRyFiReTrUcK No. I've never read it but i'll look into it :). And yes haha I'm very happy! Thank you!
teddsies teddsies Sep 28, 2011
Wow... That's really good! I loved the emotion in your wording choices! A great start to the story... There were a few grammatical error's but everyone has those! Lol .. .Loved it! Hopes you upload soon! xx