The Local Mystery (Rewriting, more or less)

The Local Mystery (Rewriting, more or less)

931 Reads 24 Votes 11 Part Story
Marissa By mysterylover16 Updated Mar 28, 2016

Virginia and two of her friends try to solve some mysteries that are happening in their town. 
And not all are present day mysteries.

poursomepixiedust poursomepixiedust Oct 26, 2011
All I can say is that it needs more descriptions. :) There's a few errors too. This just needs editing. So far, the story is interesting. ^_^ Keep on writing. :)
Casamli Casamli Oct 15, 2011
Hey, this is really good so far! But a little more emotion in the characters would be nice. :) Good job though! voted, fanned, and added!
Hellnobish Hellnobish Oct 14, 2011
Your first sentence could be a lot better of an introoo. I think your descriptions are deff your strong point. I saw only a few errors... Mostly captilazation but thats all :D
TigerBee TigerBee Oct 10, 2011
Hey this is going well. :) Perhaps, you could add a blurb to it! And add a nice cover to bind it all up. As for the dialogues, you could leave space in between the conversations! Hehe.
                              
                              Keep it up.
southernsweetie28 southernsweetie28 Oct 06, 2011
i love mysteries! i'll read the rest when i have more time tommorrow!
kaylarocks888 kaylarocks888 Oct 05, 2011
I like this! Voted, and added to my library! I'll finish reading it when I have more time...like tomorrow morning! Amazing job, so far!