The Genie's Possession

The Genie's Possession

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Sammy By strawberry9090 Updated Nov 11

"Don't you know me Nora," the strange man leered. Even though my heart was pounding uncontrollably, I refused to show fear. "If you come near me, I will call the police. I have 911 on speed dial," I threatened. He just laughed and took another step closer to me. "Oh, Nora, you think you can do that," he purred. In a flash he slammed me into the wall and leaned in very close. "There is no escape," he whispered.
              
              Nora just wanted to be left alone. But of course wishes like that never stay true for too long. When Nora stumbles upon a strange shoppe, she also accidentally captures the eye of an ancient genie who wants her as his mate. They say genies are supposed to be kind gentle creatures who grant wishes. However, soon Nora will not only discover the nature of a genie but also the true story of Scheherazade and how she is connected to the legendary queen.

LeandraA_23 LeandraA_23 Feb 16
I love how descriptive you are with the scene ^_^
                              P.S This is beautiful as well...I'm happy to know someone who loves writing about Genies as well
@strawberry9090 after Mr Milligan thinks she is a thief, he apologizes then says something of the effect of "Sorry about the earlier episode?"
DawnKelli DawnKelli Nov 10
3rd sentence states, "They were in all different sizes and shapes." It would sound a bit more proper to rephrase it to, "They were all different sizes and shapes."
Wow, this is possibly the only chapter I have read that didn't have grammatical errors. Congrats! I love the pacing in this chapter, its not too fast or too slow. You are a fantastic writer. However, I'm not much on the paranormal side of fiction, so we'll have to see about that.
@strawberry9090 Yeah, I agree. But usually readers gage a book from its first chapter. And one that's too long, even if its well written, can easily through them off.
This is something new, not you typical wattpad story, and that I would commend you on. It has a harry potter feel, am I right?
                              Also, why say "earlier episode" when it just occurred? 
                              Eager hands sounds way better than saying "clutches" as the character did willingly buy the books.