The Darkness of Forever

15 Part Story 530 Reads 20 Votes
Alana Topakian By alanatopakian Updated 4 years ago
What if something terrible happened to you and all you wanted to do was become the normal teenager you were before the incident and given the opportunity to have your life back again, no matter what the consequences?  Would you do it? Even if becoming “normal” again meant you would first have to become something so mythical and different and beyond anything you could ever imagine? Would you still do it?  
     Nicky is your typical teenage girl whose life unfortunately gets cut short one day by a hit and run driver.  Not able to adjust easily in the afterlife, she yearns to go back to her human life and tries desperately to find a way.  Eventually she does but  soon realizes that there are always consequences for your actions and the shadows waiting in the dark are there to make you pay for deeds done, no matter which lifetime they were performed in.
You're an excelent writer!!! This story shows promise, and i'm defenatly reading on :D
Awwww... It was sad at the beginning but it was amazing how you wrote with such emotion. I like the idea of your story its brilliant :) x
The beginning was very good! I loved how sad the beginning is becasue it let the flood of emotion hit me fast and strong. The prologue is absolutely amazing and the plot idea is very unique!
I like your idea. I like that you start your story with a very intense scene.
                                    I like how you add emotions and feelings to your main character. This is how writing in the first person should be.
this sounds really good, great details, and saw no mistakes! :)
It’s a good Mysterious start to a book. Perfect for a proIogue! I would defiantly go on. Good Job!!!