The Alpha Is My Key

The Alpha Is My Key

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alex By neary17 Updated Sep 05

He was supposed to love me, with all of my flaws, all of my scars. He was destined to save me. But, he left me down here to die, how could I ever forgive him?

alsey89 alsey89 Apr 04
 #HBC A hint about her mother maybe? Did she die? Is she gone or why? You don't need to spell it out but a hint here can be good since you say she's hoping she was with her mom.
Another thing, you have an amazing vocabulary. Just the simple fact that you used the word "whom" instead of "who"  proves this. I know for a fact that 19/20 authors here on wattpad will not use the word whom in their works at all where it is neeeded. Great work!
                               #HBC
alsey89 alsey89 Apr 04
 #HBC How big is the pack? How many people does she look after and cook for?
alsey89 alsey89 Apr 04
 #HBC I really liked the expressions you used here. I'd just like to point out that you should hint about some past experience under her brother's hands. Just to make it more clear that she's speaking from experience. :)
evendrae evendrae Jul 08
I'm gonna expand on what +storymaker1235 said. I really love how you used "whom" instead of "who." Normally, writers would have said "who I missed so desperately." 
                              
                              I love this book already!
Ah fick. The last name is the last name of a guy i like. Coincidence i think not 😂