Chaos Effect

Chaos Effect

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august By menderling Updated 4 days ago

Every sixteen-year-old was bound to have a Mark on their wrist given to them by the Council. The Marks show their fates and what they would become in the future. On the day of the Ceremony, Perrie Harper received her Mark... and it changed everything.

  • action
  • dystopian
  • fates
  • marks
  • scifi
  • writteninaction
  • youngadult
Great hook😊 but you should change the word will to would because its a word used for pass tense as is the word Knew which is already in the sentence.😁
Wait, that means her mum was 20 when she left. How old was Perrie (think that is her name) and how old was her mum and dad when she was born then?
REVOLUTION SYMBOL! I mean she already dislikes how her world works and she said marks control your destiny.
NHeartless NHeartless Jun 17
Very interesting concept! 😆 I think maybe an unknown symbol yet to be discovered? Or also another murder symbol?
drtardisong drtardisong Jan 13
instead of unlock, reveal (or insert some other synonym) might be better tbh.
moiroiroira moiroiroira Jun 18, 2016
I really like it, but I think I should warn: the action is written in past tense, while the description is written in present. I know it doesn't seem like it matters but it would flow better is it was all in past. Other than that though, I really like the setting though!