Chaos Theory | #Wattys2016

Chaos Theory | #Wattys2016

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chenle's By highroads Updated Jan 07

They said the Marks tell our fate. They said the Marks tell us what we will become in the future. No one knows what their Mark is until they reach the age of sixteen. I never knew my Mark will change everything.
  
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drtardisong drtardisong Jan 13
instead of unlock, reveal (or insert some other synonym) might be better tbh.
moiroiroira moiroiroira Jun 18, 2016
I really like it, but I think I should warn: the action is written in past tense, while the description is written in present. I know it doesn't seem like it matters but it would flow better is it was all in past. Other than that though, I really like the setting though!
fluttr fluttr Jun 24, 2016
i like this story but i think this chapter seems to move a bit fast, so in the future take some time to develop the setting. pierre goes from the truck to the building to finding out her mark pretty quickly. still a great story though!
Wallettyy Wallettyy Aug 09, 2016
I dont know why but I was execting her to be like "The name's Perrie. Perrie Winkle
RebeccaNorris RebeccaNorris Jun 07, 2016
Are the mcs intentionally named after authors you like? Suzanne Collins, Harper Lee?
drtardisong drtardisong Jan 13
Said? sAID? SAID? Man, you need a better word for that, it seems a bit understated. But I can't find a better word either so