NEW: Introducing Tap. Addictive chat stories for your 📲 Now in 10 languages
Of Rust and Gold

Of Rust and Gold

21.1K Reads 1.5K Votes 48 Part Story
the gangsta who was dissing your fly girl By Poindexter Completed

As ninth in line for the throne, Argus knows he is never to be king, but that doesn't stop him from seeking every opportunity to gain political power. More than anything he wants to escape his engagement to his cousin and, due to complications surrounding the origins of his birth, to be seen as an equal to his brothers.
          He gets his chance when a diplomatic visit reveals the plot of a stolen cargo ship that could cause national unrest for the empire, its alliances, and possibly even war.
          However, finding the stolen cargo proves to be more difficult than he thought and his only captured suspect, a pirate named Leonardo, won't tell him all the secrets he's keeping. As Argus and Leo grow closer, both to each other and discovering where the cargo disappeared, they uncover a plot that threatens the lives of their allies and enemies alike.
    Cover by: NinthShard

BriannaRoseC BriannaRoseC 2 days ago
Loving this so far. The description is great and characters. Though there are simple mistakes such as capitalizations and punctuations.  Definitely an enjoyable first chapter.
BriannaRoseC BriannaRoseC 2 days ago
I am getting a vibe that Damaris is annoying and egotistic? If she is hope she isn't too much of a problem.
Because, you know, why not kick him when he's down? This also solidifies Enyo as my favorite
Great start! I honestly don't see anything you'd need to improve on. You introduced the characters, the world, and plot very well. You used description and showed rather than told in the right amounts. I can't wait to read more. 
BriannaRoseC BriannaRoseC 2 days ago
The description is really good. In the last line, I am confused if it was specially made for the boots or got it, especially for the boots. I think if you add "made" after "specially" it would clarify. Again great description.
Awesome line. And I think, if you end it after 'in the world' and remove the rest, it would sound even better! Author knows best, though : )