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Of Rust and Gold

Of Rust and Gold

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Junebug By Poindexter Completed

As ninth in line for the throne, Argus knows he is never to be king, but that doesn't stop him from seeking every opportunity to gain political power. More than anything he wants to escape his engagement to his cousin and, due to complications surrounding the origins of his birth, to be seen as an equal to his brothers.
      
      He gets his chance when a diplomatic visit reveals the plot of a stolen cargo ship that could cause national unrest for the empire, its alliances, and possibly even war.
      
      However, finding the stolen cargo proves to be more difficult than he thought and his only captured suspect, a pirate named Leonardo, won't tell him all the secrets he's keeping. As Argus and Leo grow closer, both to each other and discovering where the cargo disappeared, they uncover a plot that threatens the lives of their allies and enemies alike.

I got a bit confused at "Rhine" since it alludes to a real world location.
                              
                              River Rhine.
                              
                              Makes me wonder if this is in the real world. (Read the clarification below.) Jarred me for a moment, but I see that is not the case.
They'd need to excel a hell of a lot to survive in a frozen wasteland. Cropping, trade (especially trade). Something to think about, although of course this is subjective. It's your character's view.
Maybe cut on the dialogue tags just a tad bit. 'droned' 'spat' I mean, doesn't matter too much, but they can get bothersome.
even a suspicion? A lot of people must be on death row then.
'argus said one he composed himself'
                              
                              run on. (as he compose) ?
useful code for an em dash.
                              
                              alt+0151
                              
                              so hold alt, punch the numbers on the keypad, let go of alt, you get this.
                              
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