The Bad Boy Kissed Me

The Bad Boy Kissed Me

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Lola By caraandnat Updated Jul 11

My name is Riley Thomson . I'm 16 years old and just your typical high school wall flower. That was until the schools bad boy ( kian Johnston ) pinned me against the wall and kissed me.

Damn who is that girl? I know the guys but the girl is really pretty
lcurt33 lcurt33 Sep 02
I had a teacher named mr McDonald once
                              He was a dick and no one liked him
                              My friend and I even came up with a song
                              It was:
                              Me McDonald is a cow
                              E I e I oh
                              
                              
                              We where such lovely students😋🦄
sparklingawintage sparklingawintage Jul 27, 2016
Nice flow. Just one or two typos. What does Amy, her mom and Kian look like? Or do we find that out later. If not I would recommend putting those suggestions in.
sparklingawintage sparklingawintage Jul 27, 2016
Why does she hate Kian so much? Does it go deeper than just him being a jerk? Try to use synonyms of the word "pinned" it makes your writing sound better.
sparklingawintage sparklingawintage Jul 27, 2016
punctuation needs to be checked. Your paragraphs and indentions fluctuate quite a lot. But it gets better with each chapter