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Agonizing Darkness

Agonizing Darkness

963 Reads 83 Votes 9 Part Story
Alex By Gamehaxxers Updated Jan 11, 2012

Aero Stanley wakes up in a cold dark chamber, not aware of where he is, and who he is. He could barely walk and explore the chamber, but he manages somehow. While looking around the chamber, he discovered the carcass of his brother, which was his first memory that returnedsince he woke up. Now he must set off on a journey to avenge the death of his brother.

XLolzX XLolzX Nov 12, 2011
Just reading the ending makes me feel sorry for the main character losing her/his parents then brother. It makes you want to read on to see what happens next. I found it interesting so I voted! =D
mizukichan11 mizukichan11 Oct 31, 2011
Awesome!! and mysterious!! Omg poor winston!! He didn't die as well did he?? :O
Gamehaxxers Gamehaxxers Oct 08, 2011
Well, I shall make it better as soon as I can. Autocorrect on my IPhone isn't the best method of editing. :)
ESYLuc ESYLuc Oct 08, 2011
Double space between your dialogue and your paragraphs
                              Check your punctuation such as apostrophes: e.g. "boys name is.." --> "boy's name is"
                              I've read some of the chapters and they're pretty short - maybe write a bit more. 
                              However, I do like the concept of the storyline.
                              - Emile
Gamehaxxers Gamehaxxers Oct 02, 2011
@xFakingaSmilex Well, after I have done enough writing, I will start editing my story to make it a little better. I'm currently just writing on my Iphone so autocorrect does all the work for me. I assure you... It will get a lot better.
xFakingaSmilex xFakingaSmilex Oct 02, 2011
Not a bad start. I'm gonna keep reading to find out more.. :D