Broken

Broken

18.2K Reads 624 Votes 12 Part Story
Khush By wandering-girl Updated Jul 17

Ariana Tookes is a girl from a middle class family. She is fun loving, always cheerful, happy and with positive attitude. She is bold and doesn't take shit from anyone. She is hard working and want to excel in her life.

Nicolas Philip Knight is a very well-known billionaire. He is dominant, ruthless. Girls worship the ground he walk on and everyone in business world fears him. No one can say no to him. He holds the power to destroy anyone in a second. He has everything he want from money to a loving family.  But there's one thing that he craves for and i.e.; love. He got his heart broken by a girl at a very young age and since then he has stayed away from love. He is broken.

What will happen when they both meet? Will Nicolas give love another chance? Will Ariana be able to mend Nicolas's broken heart? Will they be able to overcome the obstacles that come in the way of their love or they will fall apart?

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JBabyBlueee JBabyBlueee Jul 29
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                              This is a good start, even though I noticed some errors. I like how you wrote the chapter excluding the two conversations in one paragraph. I am looking forward for the next chapter.
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                              This is well written.  You're an amazing writer and I'm real enjoying it so far. I hope I get such good work even later! ♥
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                              might need some editing and also spacing between two individuals conversation because it will seem like one big block and will eventually get confusing on who is talking, other than that great job for the first chapter :D keep up the great work
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                              This is a great start. You have written well but i suppose there were some errors that probably missed your eyes. You can probably read it again amd correct them. And btw,  i really agree with @afangirlsworldXD .you need better spacing.
Subam_ Subam_ Jul 22
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                              Great start you are really good nd you story line is also good I hope that you will make this story great just little bit more efforts :D xD
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                              This is a great start to an awesome book! The advice I would give though is to maybe when someone is speaking put the different person on a different line to make it flow and easier to read. Other then that it was great!!