Riddle Of The Owl 🦉(Completed)

Riddle Of The Owl 🦉(Completed)

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EinatSegal By EinatSegal Completed

"When I look into your eyes, I know where you've been, I know what you saw that night in the forest. I know what you are now."
In the empire, where any entanglement with magic and demons can result in severe punishment, sixteen-year-old mathematician, Alleria, knows that remaining off the radar is her best chance of keeping her mysterious childhood experience a secret.

But when, on a whim, she attempts the preliminary exams for the bureaucracy, Alleria opens a dangerous path to greatness. Her uncanny intelligence earns her the attention of a rich sponsor who would see her elevated into the ruling Scholar class - and thus extend his own influence within the empire. 

A woman in a world of men and the youngest Scholar in history - Alleria is convinced that she's on the road towards self-destruction - yet she can't seem to stop. 

A terrible crisis is brewing, one that has potential to create unforetold catastrophes. The solution lies in a mathematical problem that has eluded mankind for centuries. Unable to turn a blind eye, Alleria hangs her future on the line in an attempt to solve this problem. But when mathematics go hand in hand with magic, the risks involved may prove to be fatal and the end result is nothing she could have anticipated.
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Luminis92 Luminis92 Feb 04
Is the chapter broken or is it just me? The paragraph ends in the middle of a word "border of the fo"..
I don't know why, but describing her as a "dreamer" seems a little bit weird in this context. I would maybe use the word, "ghost," instead. I don't think "dreamer" is a good word when describing someone in action.
Your writing is refreshing! From one watty award winner to another ❤
a dissonance of sound that tore at her ears and soul... <3 that's beautiful
Making no ripples in the world, that's a beautiful description
Also, forgot to add, but to make it flow better, ditch the modal verb, "was," and instead write, "fell off her body." It'll help it flow better.