The Night Children[On Hold]

The Night Children[On Hold]

4.6K Reads 89 Votes 11 Part Story
Jessica By xxXDeathByLoveXxx Updated Aug 07, 2012

When you are born, you can either be a night time child or a day time child. Everyone wants to be a day time child. If you are born from 7:30pm-11:59pm you are born a night child. With a 3% chance of having powers. I was unlucky and was born on 11:59 and was in that 3% chance. Here is a story on how I battled through dark times, fell in love, and lost many...many dear friends.

Studies156 Studies156 Jul 16, 2013
It grabbed my attention like no other story I've read, God damn it why I be that three percent *Jokes*
dragonz21 dragonz21 Jan 25, 2011
this is getting good lol but put more details into the surroundings and also how people look and act. make different points of view of characters and how they see and feel about others.
dragonz21 dragonz21 Jan 25, 2011
great beginning but quite a bit of gramatical errors also you should point out or make it obvious if you want to make a message cause it was a bit confusing in the beginning. but over all it has a great introduction that can capture the reader to read more lol keep up the good work
Ed-rom Ed-rom Jan 03, 2011
i really like this!
                              the idea behind it is something like ones ve had before.
                              your writing makes the characters realistic and obvious but just to help i would tone down the rawness of the characters or possibly deepen their backgrounds. but so far so good.
J020163 J020163 Nov 08, 2010
a few grammer errors, but other then that :) its good.
                              im gunna read on... see where it takes me this time :)
J020163 J020163 Nov 08, 2010
its a nice begainning... very catchy and u cn toldily tell wats going on.. even tho its only the first chpt. 
                              
                              :) keep it up ok.