Someday, Ace [Rory & Logan]

Someday, Ace [Rory & Logan]

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brittany By otratournjh Updated Oct 23

Logan was crushed she said no. The love of his life made a choice and she didn't choose him. As he walked away from the beautiful girl in her cap and gown he made a promise to himself, he was not going to give up.

*Contains some adult content such as alcohol, cursing, and sexual content.*

jenalee28 jenalee28 Dec 01, 2015
You write internal dialogue so well. Her feelings are very clear and heartfelt. I think you could make this chapter really pop with some more setting descriptions, so we can get a feel for what's going on around her.
jenalee28 jenalee28 Dec 01, 2015
I think this is a nice teaser opening. I can really get a feel for his heartbreak, and it's beautifully written!
laura703 laura703 Nov 30, 2015
My thoughts for this chapter are the same as those of the previous one.
                              It would be better for you to give more details so that other readers who have not watched the movie can still understand the story
laura703 laura703 Nov 30, 2015
It was a short but interesting start. 
                              But I think bit would be better if extended the chapter a bit to give us more detail on what's he feels