you want to read this. really, you do. and you should.
@wheres-gezza thanks for the feedback! I think my actual plan is to re-upload the beginning, because the story plan has changed... thank you!
@KnockEmDeadBabe Thank you! Thanks for commenting and everything, I really appreciate it! :)
I Loved the beginning
you introduced the characters well :)
You have a new fan now!
and i am reading on!
This is a good start. I agree with what a couple of commenters have mentioned about showing not telling, I prefer finding about about characters in this way, rather than just being told what people are doing and why. :)
@steph612 Thanks so much! I know, I almost feel like I should change the alarm clock part, but I feel like I wrote it that way so I'll just keep it. But I definitely won't start a story that way again. :P
Thanks for reading! & I plan on reading the rest of your story when I get time also. :D
:0 so dows she get a bf or what???!?!?! IEEEEEE Mooooore preaaaase!!!!