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Bedazzled [MXM]✓

Bedazzled [MXM]✓

50.6K Reads 3.7K Votes 20 Part Story
ѕαιɴт cαlιeɴdo By saintc Completed

Jeffery is sick, sea sick.

After a mysterious creature from the depths saved him from drowning, Jeffery just can't seem to keep his head out of the water. Bound in lust and put in a compromising situation, Jeffery makes an astonishing decision to go forth to find this merman.

Cover by @coolauthorchic

twistedhatter- twistedhatter- Jul 06, 2016
I do like this beginning. It is a great chapter to hook in with. There are very few mistakes in here that I could spot. I love the mystery surrounding the mystery person who is possibly a merman, it adds to the suspense and atmosphere.
U won't believe how long I've been searching for a merman boyxboy story
Staysweet18 Staysweet18 Oct 02, 2016
                              I'm really intrigued to find out what happens to Jeff, and what the creature is. Overall it was a good prolouge, left me with a lot of questions I want answered, can't wait to read more.
PawenaKaniah PawenaKaniah Jun 30, 2016
                              Hi @saintc
                              I love how you open up your prologue on a dialogue, it cannot fail to capture attention. Your narrative flows naturally. I love this.
                              I love how the LGBT nuance of the prologue is not overpowering, it flows like it's the most natural thing.
Shreechandra Shreechandra Jun 30, 2016
Starting prologue with some dialogues is the best according to me . Your book is different from the other LGBT . I like the prologue very much.
jollyreaderjennell jollyreaderjennell Jul 27, 2016
                              I love your ending how you add in the bedazzled in it.. Your description was good. I'm very  curious as to what the creature is. I didn't notice any grammatical error which is good. I also like how you build suspense. The start was good too, waking up on a breach very usual.