The 17 year of Renessme's life

The 17 year of Renessme's life

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sierra16rain By sierra16rain Updated Oct 05, 2012

What would she be like in her own way?

Jaylay Jaylay Dec 03, 2012
this is very good... but if use quotation marks it makes it easier for the reader understand who and when someone is talking..... but this is a really awesome chapter :D
Jaylay Jaylay Dec 03, 2012
this is very good... but if use quotation marks it makes it easier for the reader understand who and when someone is talking..... but this is a really awesome chapter :D
JoJoWrites JoJoWrites Jul 03, 2012
I gave it a go, but your lack of grammar and punctuation made it impossible for me to finish the first chapter. I strongly suggest you get a *good* beta before you post.
UniqueeType UniqueeType Jan 18, 2012
i like it but u neva heard of quotation marks its really confusing and bagel is not spelled B-A-G-G-E-L. please just edit next time because i really like your book alot and i hope u make another one.
JerseyShorelover1 JerseyShorelover1 Jun 15, 2011
It's to much like jenluvsreading falling stars it is almost exactly like hers in a way which is disappointing because hers came first an hers I better an she knows what to put an stuff an how to spell 
i_sell_seashells i_sell_seashells Apr 23, 2011
it really confused me without the quotation marks, and when theres a new speaker it a new paragraph: 
                              
                              "Hi" I said.
                              "Hey"  He said.
                              "Whats up?"  He asked
                              "Nothing."  I answered. 
                              
                              
                              sucky dialogue but thats an example.
                              
                              other than that its goood