What would she be like in her own way?
this is very good... but if use quotation marks it makes it easier for the reader understand who and when someone is talking..... but this is a really awesome chapter :D
I gave it a go, but your lack of grammar and punctuation made it impossible for me to finish the first chapter. I strongly suggest you get a *good* beta before you post.
i like it but u neva heard of quotation marks its really confusing and bagel is not spelled B-A-G-G-E-L. please just edit next time because i really like your book alot and i hope u make another one.
It's to much like jenluvsreading falling stars it is almost exactly like hers in a way which is disappointing because hers came first an hers I better an she knows what to put an stuff an how to spell
it really confused me without the quotation marks, and when theres a new speaker it a new paragraph:
"Hi" I said.
"Hey" He said.
"Whats up?" He asked
"Nothing." I answered.
sucky dialogue but thats an example.
other than that its goood