Thieves Rebellion

Thieves Rebellion

428 Reads 15 Votes 2 Part Story
Kayla By live_laugh_love1990 Updated Oct 16, 2010

Quick, Pyro and Psych are the youngest ever members of the Draecville Thieves Guild. They also happen to be the leaders of said guild. One day they are approached by the leaders of the newest rebellion. They are wanted to join because of their unique gifts. Will they abandon their leadership roles in the thieves guild for something better.

live_laugh_love1990 live_laugh_love1990 Oct 17, 2010
@electriceelz i don't know... i was thinking maybe just 5 comments... lol... @DunkOkapi thanks... i'll try to keep this all in mind for the next chapter!!
DrunkOkapi DrunkOkapi Oct 16, 2010
I wouldn't put parentheses in the middle of the telepathic talking. It just looks off. Instead, maybe try using the <> as quotation marks - <Yeah,> Hawthorn agreed. <Why...>
                              
                              Yeah, like that. 
electriceelz electriceelz Oct 16, 2010
so do you want comenst from 5 difenrent people or can i cometn 5 times??? lol