The Badboy Hates Me

The Badboy Hates Me

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JasmineClover By readparamour Updated Dec 24, 2016

"You know what I hate about you?" His minty breath fanning my face. He placed his both hands on the wall right beside my head. His eyes dance a lot of emotions I couldn't decipher as his gaze moved from my eyes down to my lips.

Gulp.  "W-What?" I breathed nervously.

"You reminded me of her,"he whispered into my ear," and I fucking hate it." he pushed himself away from me and slammed the door shut.

HappyMeMonster HappyMeMonster Dec 01, 2016
'Be dead' because 'died' is past tense and in this context you are trying to represent past present. Something along those lines.
EshaTinks EshaTinks Dec 04, 2016
Kidnap* sell* *rape me. Those are the things you got wrong. Not being rude just a friendly correction to help