The mask

The mask

640 Reads 76 Votes 4 Part Story
Kat By harrypotter13star Updated Sep 07, 2011

She will never be the same. Her life will be filled with anger,sadness and guilt. Her life will be one of a monster.

  • angel
  • anger
  • diary
  • girl
  • grave
  • happiness
  • mask
  • monster
  • soul
  • yard
miniMina miniMina Aug 30, 2011
Okay,
                              
                              COMPLIMENT SANDWICH!
                              Your sentences are very short, this makes them striking and filled with suspense.
                              It's just a little bit short. Wish you wrote more so I knew more about exactly what I would be reading, 
                              Not a great amount of detail, which adds to the drama. 
                              
                              Goodstuff. ;D
Lewington Lewington Aug 29, 2011
Interesting & mysterious introduction.
                              Short, Sweet and makes you wantto read on.
XxDontmesswithmexX XxDontmesswithmexX Aug 29, 2011
wow it's very...uhm...weird(In a good way lol)  and yes, creepy(: I like it!
                              
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Ferret-bird Ferret-bird Aug 28, 2011
hmmm.... I find myself wondering what the point of this is. I mean, it's barely a paragraph long. Not something i would consider a prologue. You need to ask yourself what this adds to the story and if it is really needed. 
                              
                              Since this is really short I will go to the next chapter and read it ^^
ChiChi123 ChiChi123 Aug 28, 2011
Is it wrong to say when I saw this title my first and second thought was "Jim Carrey" and "The Goosebumps Series"
ToastedBagels ToastedBagels Aug 28, 2011
Who did she kill? Why did she kill her? GAH! I need answers... so I'm off to the next chapter :)