Hush, Little Baby

Hush, Little Baby

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FindingAVoice By FindingAVoice Updated Jan 09, 2013

Isabella, the Keeper, is gone. She disappeared without a trace, but will Nikki, her sister, sit back and let the police handle it? Not. A. Chance. Nikki knows that this Songbird, a Hypnotist, is who took her sister, and Songbird took her for a reason. Nikki as the Protector has to get her back or the past humans will become extinct on the Day of Choice. Nikki teams up with some boys from school and an Infinite girl. As they search for the Keeper, they all learn deadly secrets about each other. Will they learn to keep it in the past or will they let it guide them to destruction? They all have a long path ahead of them. Discovery, hate, regret, love, friendship, betrayal, understanding, and more is what they have to get to to even have a chance of recovering the sacred Keeper. Going up against this killer would be like suicide, but Isabella is worth it. With that, Nikki is prepared to die.

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  • boy
  • chapter
  • devil
  • girl
  • henchman
  • hush
  • killing
  • little
  • lizard
  • narutodreamer013
  • pikachu
  • skater
  • songbird
  • spree
  • wings
ClaireWhiteway ClaireWhiteway Jan 08, 2013
This is one of best prologue's I have read (Not that I have read much). It definitely pulls the reader in. I don't really have anything to critique on, so good on you.
                              
                              Claire :)
LaurenAtterberyRodri LaurenAtterberyRodri Dec 23, 2011
It's a powerful opening to your story. You have a few issues with verb tense. "I don't know if I wanted to keep this one or not." It should read "I didn't know if I wanted to keep this one or not." 
                              
                              Otherwise, it was haunting, especially the song. It makes me want to continue to read it. :)
FindingAVoice FindingAVoice Dec 22, 2011
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                              @Annalyn
                              Thank you guys! I really appriciate your comments! :D
Annalyn Annalyn Dec 22, 2011
Wonderful prologue! It has a haunting feel to it, especially with the song. Reading on...
FindingAVoice FindingAVoice Dec 17, 2011
@iownelephants
                              Thank you! I really tried to make this chapter creepy! Haha! ;)
FindingAVoice FindingAVoice Dec 17, 2011
@livelaughlove33
                              Haha! Thanks! That new character is coming in the fifth chapter!! :D ;)