FireSweet

FireSweet

22.6K Reads 871 Votes 42 Part Story
Andreana Riot By AndreanaRiot Completed

"My name changed before my eyes, the paper before me read "Welcome Gittoran Scarlet", I felt a searing pain in my left shoulder and the world spun around me.  I dropped to the floor, and blacked out." 
Gittoran was your average party-girl with attitude, and when she is thrown into the teenage nightmare, etiquette camp, her only intention is to escape. The world she ends up in, however, is not the one she left.  Full of leering pirates and cryptic prophesies, Gittoran has to learn to steal and slit throats for a living, or serve them for the rest of her life.

  • fight
  • fire
  • girl
  • griffin
  • griffon
  • pirates
rehianna13 rehianna13 Oct 09, 2011
I thought it was good. It definitely could use a little editing and more description. Some parts led me to confusion because I personally didn't get the whole laughing thing. It could use a little work but other than that it was a good story.
MarineLynn MarineLynn Aug 30, 2011
It's good but the second to last paragraph is pretty long. Try to break that up.
                              Overall I'm actually curious on how the school made her brother so different. 
                              I'll be reading ahead!
LuvPink LuvPink Aug 30, 2011
Woah.... I'm really liking this so far :O Off to the next chapter!
Startingfresh Startingfresh Aug 30, 2011
Whoa great first chapter. It seems really different from all the stories I've read on here so far. Can't wait to read what happens next! =D
EscapetotheStars EscapetotheStars Aug 30, 2011
The story itself is good. So thumbs up on that :) As for the errors, you have little spelling errors, but you DO have grammatical errors. Check out the Wattpad Editor club, and get someone to help u edit ur story. That'll help perfect it:) Good luck!
vengefulkarma vengefulkarma Aug 29, 2011
Scary to think of...my  mom wanted me to take an etiquette class, but it took me forever to convince her that all it takes is excellent acting skills and a fake smile. This is original and really interesting. I really liker her character. :D
                              Voted :)