This is a totally class cliche story about an undercover fighter in highschool.
It was fine but my friend was thinking about the punctuation can improve
That wasn't terrible u r a really good so if people want to be bitches then screw them
After every time I write a sentence with dialogue u shouldn't write said and u will spice it up and give ur characters a little more emotion
Again this was great you writing is not terrible at all dont bring yourself down
Stop being so nervous about your story
I good as long as it goes well 'n' u update
Hmm.... *uses the little brains I got* ...ok, got an insult for the 'bad boy' to say to her.
'No one wants you here, your weak and pathetic'
'Aw, is the wittle nerd gonna cry?'
'Thats right, go run to your mommy!'