In the process of being edited and adding new chapters. :/
@LoveYouMe If you'd like, you can edit for me and what not?
@frakkevin Well I'm working on more eventful chapters just for your entertainment danna -_-
This is interesting in that I want to know what happens next, but I think you need to work on tenses.. like for example you might have "He jumped" at one point and then "She says" at the other. It doesn't flow... You know?
The writing is good, but nothing eventful happens. This is the first chapter, it has to be awesome and want people to read more. I must admit, it's harder to do with a drama, so I'll cut you some slack
@HisLastWords Thanks! By the way I love your story.