A night with Dracula

A night with Dracula

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♡¸.•°*”˜Sarah Kitty˜”*°•.¸♡ By kissmybff Completed

"I wanna kill you.." He whispered huskily.
"I dare you" I said.
Seventeen year old Sonee rave win's a contest to go stay at Dracula's castle for two week's and everything is fine at first..
before two people have gone missing or at least that's what their telling us... but soon after sonee goes looking around in a secret passage way and stumble's into a secret room? and meet's a sexy pale guy with a cute Romanian  accent and he demand's that she come's to see her every night at the stroke of midnight or he'll kill her and her missing friend's 
will they fall in love or will this be a murder that no mortal can solve?

Werewolves in Paris (Side story)

 Johnny is absolutely miserable after his girlfriend of two years dumps him and ends up attacking a guard at a vampires castle, so he’s thrown into prison for murder and that’s when he meets the mystifying Bliss Morgale.
White hair that flows softly down to her lower back, White eyes that glow like the moon, White snake tattoos, and don’t forget her flawless pale skin that’s as white as her… well everything!
She and Johnny escape the prison together and run off to Paris where Bliss show’s Johnny where she loves to be herself, And Johnny soon feels himself falling in love in the most romantic place in the world.

I kinda hate the grammar, but this is good. Don't forget to capitalize nouns. And, I feel like you are talking to us instead of describing things. If you really were the girl you would be describing the sensations. To make this even better add some figurative language like similes and imagery.
Hey , I'm loving this book it's so intriguing, great writing skills. I absolutely love , does anyone think they could check out some of my fics and give feedback ? Xoxo
When you edit this story (If you ever do so.), you should listen to the advice people give you in these comments, they are quite helpful.
alexandrusar alexandrusar 5 days ago
I'm trippen out and I'm super excited because I'm Romanian;D I can't wait to see how you plot out the story, I live in America though ;( haven't gotten the chance to see Romania for myself yet
For those who still don't know who Bram Stoker or what 'Dracula' is, I am terribly disappointed. I am a werewolf and yet I know so yeah. Please go read the actual book, its amazing
monkytails monkytails Nov 05
U grammar can't be worse then mines that for sure 😂😂😂😂 
                              Its true 😰