Bella sister(jasper)

Bella sister(jasper)

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sillyenid_100 By sillyenid_100 Completed

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Hi I'm Jennifer but people call me Jenny.I have a twin sister named Bella and we have decided to move back to Forks with our dad.Well our parents divorced when we were little and we always used to stay there every summer.Anyway we lived in Phoenix  but our mom remarried. Phil her new husbands travel a lot and our mom stay with us but we knew that made her unhappy so we decided to move with our dad for a little while.Then let's say after I met Jasper my life was turned around. 

hi guys this is my 2 fan fiction.Just keep in mind that I only own Jennifer, Stephanie Meyer owns every other character.Enjoy the book.❤️❤️❤️

Between "●morning●" and "'this' I ask" all yoir sentences start with "I" And the first page is only 2 paragraphs. But I'm not trying to sound rude at all, I really like this book so far♥♡♥
Since I'm stuck in a Central Texas summer my first thought was 
                              WOW That's cold! 
                              I genuinely felt that it should be snowing
Sweetiepie_ Sweetiepie_ Apr 07
Space it the conversation. Make it multiple paragraphs and stead of one big super paragraph. It's makes it very hard for the reader to understand what is going.