Shane is 15 years old....He was his parents only child unitl recently.  They've adopted a 13 year old girl who seems to be a perfect abomonation.  To Shane at least.  But on the first night she spends something...odd happens...
(This takes place in Barbados)

  • angels
  • barbados
  • beach
  • bible
  • blood
  • captive
  • church
  • crap
  • creature
  • demon
  • devil
  • evil
  • fear
  • girl
  • god
  • gore
  • haunting
  • hush
  • lucifer
  • murder
  • night
  • pain
  • religion
  • scream
  • shane
  • thrill
  • tragedy
  • trap
  • trouble
LeighFrankie LeighFrankie May 13, 2011
serously you have a gift to scare people!!! Awesome!!!
                              
                              I'm scared of the girl!! You have an awesome way of describing things!
                              
                              VOTED
LeighFrankie LeighFrankie May 13, 2011
I am a FAN of horror but tends to avoid it as my imagination tends to run wild and overcomes my thinking! haha
                              
                              reading it.. nice chapter..
                              
                              Voted!
AngusEcrivain AngusEcrivain Jan 30, 2011
@meenie 
                              
                              haha it's all good! You're a talented writer and the odd typo is understandable... we're all guilty of it because our eyes see what we want to see, and none of us want to see mistakes! :D
InkBlackUniverse InkBlackUniverse Jan 30, 2011
@DeathRage yeah thanks lol i dont normall read over what i type up but ive got to start lol
AngusEcrivain AngusEcrivain Jan 30, 2011
This is really good.. you have some serious suspense going on here :) I like it :)
AngusEcrivain AngusEcrivain Jan 30, 2011
A very good first chapter.. very enjoyable! One typo I noticed.. you missed the 'e' from Shane after she asks if she can check out her room too... :D