This is a maleXmale story..also my first time at writing so please be nice..
You should also work on a description. People tend to skip over storys with no descriptions.
Um. This surprised me so much. My name is Alaura and this is the first story that had my name in it. It is so cool!!! I know nothing to do with the actual story srry!!!
I'm not mean,well on certain occasions. But,I'll only put nice criticism.
Lol I like how he's laid back and proper at the same time. This should be fun
I just started this story and I like it so far! I little editing or having someone edit your work would truly help you I love the characters so far
The story is good but not great. You need to edit it or find an editor or beta reader. Its hard to read and all the words are squished together.