That Night in August

That Night in August

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MrsCosmopilite By MrsCosmopilite Completed

When Egil Magnusson moved to his late father's place in rural South Dakota, he was looking forward to peace and quiet.  Instead, he finds himself dealing with weird neighbors, old resentments, and an unsolved murder.

LizCharnes LizCharnes Mar 16, 2016
I'm reading both your stories because I love your style.  As for comments, critiques, I got nothing. I'm going to fly through this, I can tell. 
                              
                              And how did you meet my grandmother to put her in your book? You know she even has that purple purse... :)
AsmaaAbuaisha AsmaaAbuaisha Sep 16, 2016
Omg that woman. She's doing it again. PLEASE LEAVE HIM ALONE AND GO
                              Typical nosey neighbours
SamMaze SamMaze Apr 06, 2016
Hello!
                              
                              This was a nice start to your tale. At times the narrative was a bit too casual for me, but besides that this was good. :)
indyjohn indyjohn Apr 18, 2016
Good, natural sounding dialogue.  I know people like that!  Like the purple hair description too.
RighterWriter RighterWriter Mar 30, 2016
I love this already! Super intriguing and you have a great voice! Such a good intro I can't wait to read more
anupamarc anupamarc Jan 07
There's something about Egil, I like him already. Maybe its just the way Donna talks to him or that he wants to keep to himself. I get the feeling Donna is harmless as in not capable of murder etc but probably just a nosy neighbour.