An adventurous girl on a pink bicycle meets a tall blonde boy on Chestnut Street. Right in front of the old burnt-down mental hospital. What can go wrong?
This story is interesting eventhough im still at chapter 1,soon i will be finishing is book
You're making me both love and hate the character of Wendy! I love the dynamic of the relationship between her and Kyle, both teasing older brother/caring younger sister and strangers, I can't wait to see how that pans out
This is amazing, beautiful description and original and interesting characters, even the dialogue brings them to life which is something I personally struggle with. You've certainly got me hooked
I like it. It would be fun if the chapters were a slight longer?
So this is a critique,first it was weird in the smoking kyle, in the near house the expression is kinda vague, well the lines were beautifully written,just put on emotions I mean more emotions to make it creepier
Hope this would help,
I really like this story so far! Kyle is so creepy and mysterious. I like him as a character. :D