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The Pure And The Half

The Pure And The Half

13.4K Reads 436 Votes 15 Part Story
Pine cone By Hetaliafanwriter Updated Mar 08

Just a simple reminder note for those who read it

CupcakeQueen40 CupcakeQueen40 Mar 23, 2016
*is expecting Italy to jump out yelling Pasta* No? Okay...moving on..
Sypheria Sypheria Apr 05, 2016
Good chapter but please use commas and points! 'As' doesn't do the job
Grimmire Grimmire Aug 13, 2016
The plot is great, actually! But some constructive criticism, when you're doing dialogue, you capitalize the first letter as if you're doing a sentence. And if you want to add something in between, you put a comma. Like this~
                              "Hello," said the tall man. "My name is Jack."
TheRandomNoodle TheRandomNoodle Apr 10, 2016
This is totally off topic but am I the only one if I have to walk home in the dark I acted like I'm being chased by vampires?
- - Dec 13, 2015
Update soon I don't think I can wait!!! Also I think the way you write is awesome!
Otaku_Izumi_kun Otaku_Izumi_kun Oct 28, 2015
This is a cool story so far can't wait for he next chapter !